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Gregory Blair's avatar

Wow! That was extremely effective! Very creepy and methodical. Bravo!

Jeremy Lo's avatar

Thank you sir!

Reina Cruz's avatar

So creepy!

Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

Absolutely superb!

I love the use of repetition. I do that myself and when done well it's wonderfully effective.

I shall be checking out more of your writing in the near future when I have some time.

And what was really creepy about this - and realistic - is how children are used as the target. That's the reality of subversion - you get them young, condition a generation and when that generation grow up and have children of their own they pass it down to the next, and so on.

This will happen. Absolutely.

Brilliant writing, this. Brilliant!

Sarah Rusch's avatar

I LOVE this!

Nick Winney's avatar

very very good!